I can remember it all. I was in the sixth grade, and I was at my friend's house. What happened? Tears, clutching, and waving. She pulled tightly and firmly onto my shirt. I could already see a lake of tears on her lap, it was all happening so fast. My father was being transferred, and I was going along with him. She cried and cried, and couldn't stop. I tried my best to cheer her up, but it had already gotten her depressed. After a while she stopped, she wiped away the last of her tears and she became strong.
Her puffy red eyes told a story, what we had been through, what we had done together...all of it. I start to wonder "Is this REALLY the end? NO WAY! We'll keep in touch and we'll meet again...definitely." We get up, and my dad asks if I'm ready to go. I support my friend, and she nods slowly. It was time to say goodbye... I put on the helmet, and get on the scooter. As she bursts into tears I wave and say "See ya." She waves slowly, replies, and I'm on my way home. The last time I saw her, the last time I've been with her...for now. Now we're trying to organize a meeting during one of the school breaks, I think she's still living in Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia. I haven't seen her for a year and some months, but we've been in contact. I'll definitely meet her someday, maybe not now or soon...but someday.
STEPHANIEEEE what a beautiful memoir monday, that shows a lot of your feelingsssss!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI luv the part when you said "Her puffy red eyes told a story, what we had been through, what we had done together" AMAZING. O.O !!
The story flowed perfectly and had details on it too. It may seem short, but just by reading that, I could also remember the time I had to leave my friends and how sad I was. I totally understand how you feel! Nice work! :D
Wow nice story steph. Lots of imagery and description. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteSteph I loved your memoir monday. I agree with Yeji saying that, this shows a lot of your feelings!
ReplyDeleteI can describe it in one word: AMAZING!! and with another one : AWESOME!!!
I loved it!! I agree that it shows a lot of how your feeling when you say goodbye. I can tell how you felt an how everything in the setting was sad. Great Job!!
ReplyDeletehey steph. i loved your memori monday, it actually made me KINDA sad. I liked how you used imagery on you'r work, and I really like the part when you say "Her puffy red eyes told a story, what we had been through, what we had done together...all of it".
ReplyDeleteit was amazing. keep up the good work
heeeeeey steaph
ReplyDeleteI really liked your memoir monday. it also kinda made me sad. i liked how you used alot of imagery to discribe the situation, and I also liked this part of the story.Her puffy red eyes told a story, what we had been through, what we had done together...all of it.
keep up the good work step!
NICE MEMOIR! it showed alot of imagery and feeling. My favorite part was when you said "Her puffy red eyes told a story, what we had been through, what we had done together"
ReplyDeleteHey Steph, Beautiful, just Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI could really see the scent happening, fabulous imagery and I am also agreeing with Yeji, "Her puffy red eyes told a story, what we had been through, what we had done together..." It's just beautiful, If your name wasn't on it, I would swear it came from a famous poet.
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